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Would we taste the same if we dripped with the same Vehemance?
And can we go back to a time where we shyly hid our middle names,
And touch was a thing we weren't used to?
Silence hid the same way our gaze did from each other.
Our feet were a thing to be studied, it seemed.
As we fumbled awkwardly,
Our hands a thing to be twisted.
And twisted again.

But would they interlock the way we longed?

Copious amounts of emotion filtered through our words.
And the right ear could pick out a note of loneliness.
The right nose, pick up the scent of our nervous fever as we committed to something uncertain.

Unsure.
We were so unsure.

...Excuses.

And we silently inquire
Is this the way it was supposed to be?
Do we connect the same way we had intended to?
Are we tainted with appetite, now, that we've had a taste of giving in?
This passion, can it be found, or are we to invent it from the wrong feelings?

We apostatize each others causes.
We watched it Decay, but still we clung.
Your attentions were split with the silence.
You desert us now, but still you're here.

Echoes.

Can we drift so far apart without a note of virtue?
Can we fade so easily without being washed away?

Unclean.
We felt so unclean.

Preeminent bliss lingers in the background.
And it waits for us to hold it.




But god damned it, we can't hold it.
©2006-2009 ~Tesia
:icontesia:

Author's Comments

It's called Sex, as it says.

About the damaging impact lust can have on the strain of needing to feel wanted, and how people confuse that need with love, but really, all it turns out to be is just physical enjoyment and one lost person comforting another.

Sex without love.
Pure physical enjoyment, but leading to nothing more, eventually, leading to emptiness. But still hanging on.
Ruining some people.
Not admitting that there is no spark there, but only the need to be wanted by somebody, physically.

That's what this poem is about.



[ for those of you who are only visiting this poem in my gallery, please, read [link] this one as well. ]

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:iconsolitary-silhouette:
It's not all nice and flowly but I think it suits it better. In this structure it seems to be more like a stream of consciousness, where an individual has begun to question themself and the other, sifting through their feelings of pain and lonliness and attempting to interpret and admit to themselves what it is that's wrong. A sort of pain is conveyed when the verses don't just weave and merge flawlessly into a single slick line. It flows well but its not 'flowly'...I don't know if that makes any sense.
Anyhow, I really enjoyed this piece, it's relatable and real. Wonderful work as always. ^_^
:iconnuozek:
An enjoyable read.. though I have nothing to critique, I think it has some nice metaphors for emotion I know exist within love, and within the realization of ones own fears for what something once so special could eventually become.

Dont be afraid to let yourself go to someone, infact when the time is right.. I think you cant control it. And for those reasons it is right. I like to look at the bad as being something which made the good even better, and the overall experience, something which can teach you alot about yourself. Relationships can still have love, but one or both of the people are no longer 'in love'. That doesn't neccasarily make it a bad thing, just a different place.
:icontubam:
Self deprecation is awesome. Except when it's not. Self preservation? It's pretty, naiive I guess? But pretty. Vehemence is a bit of a strong word. You ever throw chords on any of these?
:icontesia:
nah, I'm not talented enough when it comes to making it into music.

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I never saw a wild animal feel sorry for itself.
:iconlohey:
As usual, conscious thoughts... ;)

I'd say, sex is not the main prison for relationships... the prison is the image that the thought can create of each others... if I have sex with the image of someone, the image I've created of her/him, then I cannot make love to her/him, here and now... that is hte prison.. to me... :p

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« The man who trades freedom for security does not deserve nor will he ever receive either. » Benjamin Franklin

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:iconhatredtheblack:
Wow, this is sure something to be shared. I can't tell you how glad I am that you bit your reluctance and decided to share it. The poetic implications are brilliant: 'Our feet were a thing to be studied, it seemed.', a great way to portray flat out, mortifiying shyness. You are indeed a brilliant artist. I really wish you'd post more of your art. I don't see it that often, but when I do, I'm never left unimpressed.

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Take a look at my Sculptures.
Emotive Surrealism. You know you want it.
I also make Musicians, too.
:icontesia:
<Small> Thankyou so much. That made me smile. I'm so glad you appreciate my art, and I'm working on posting more. I have alot of drawings that I haven't taken the time to scan, photos I haven't fixed or taken, Paintings I haven't photographed yet. Now that I know someone will definately be looking forward to seeing them, I will make more of an effort.

Thankyou so much for your words.

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I never saw a wild animal feel sorry for itself.
:iconhatredtheblack:
You absolutely deserve them. I'm remembering back, we first got in contact when you faved my Jules Hodgson piece. (Thanks again!) Odd that you found me first. But enough of that, I love this piece, along with your others and am eagerly awaiting more of your material.

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Take a look at my Sculptures.
Emotive Surrealism. You know you want it.
I also make Musicians, too.
:iconimagen:
This is the first Poem I've read on Deviantart. I really like that I feel that I can relate to it. With so many of my relationships I've had these feelings you have so eloquantly put into words. I feel a little bad because with a lot of my earlier realetionships I didn't express or communicate any of my concerns. I get the feeling that the other person in this realtionship has done the same. Clung onto a dream rather than understanding whats wrong.
2 things...
1. I'm really happy I chose to read this poem.
2. I'm even happier that you shared it - Thanks.

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:icontesia:
Wow, I really really appreciate that. Thankyou for taking the time.

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I never saw a wild animal feel sorry for itself.

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